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Writing Assignment for Workshop 04/06/2024

Writing Assignment for Workshop 04/06/2024

OLS Community Manager Marieke írta időpontban
Válaszok szám: 4

Dear community, dear workshop attendees,

As mentioned during the English community workshop on the 4th of June 2024, I'd like to offer you a writing assignment with which you can practice your English writing, storytelling and imagination skills. If you send in your written piece in the comments by midnight on the 12th of June 2024 you will be guaranteed of a personal feedback on your writing. 

The Writing Assignment

  • Task: finish the following story and write your own ending in approximately 350 words
  • Genre: the genre of the story is myth and/or fairytale
  • Conclusion:the story has a positive ending and must end with the words "and he/they lived happily ever after"
This is how the story begins:

'Once upon a time there was a young boy with a big and dark frown. He was a happy boy, but everyone thought he was sad because of his frown. One time when no one wanted to play with him after school and his parents were still at work, he wandered off into the woods and…'

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I wish you the best of luck with this assignment! I'm sure you'll come up with a beautiful story that is uniquely yours! I'm looking forward to reading it :-)

Warmly,

Marieke, OLS Community Manager

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Válasz erre: OLS Community Manager Marieke

Re: Writing Assignment for Workshop 04/06/2024

Yaman Aysegul írta időpontban
He gone a little, he gone a long way, he gone up and down the river (turkish: az gitmiş uz gitmiş dere tepe düz gitmiş:)Then he meets his mother and says: Mom, weren't you at work, what are you doing here? His mother also hugs her son and say: I love you and i know why you are upset, my dear son. I'm a fairy and don't tell your father that. I will help you. There is a magic blueberry in this forest, we need to find it. When you eat it, you will become a fairy and you will be fine. You will be popular at school.
Then they find that magic blueberry together and the child eats it. As soon as he eats it, he turns into a fairy and becomes popular at school. Then they all live happily together ever after. (Ps every mom is a little bit fairy:)
Válasz erre: OLS Community Manager Marieke

Re: Writing Assignment for Workshop 04/06/2024

Kemmlage Jona Samira írta időpontban
...and soon realized that he got lost. The trees were as high as the sky and the sun already set behind the hills. It was the first time his thoughts overcame his happy soul. The boy sat down and sighed.

"Oh, hello! Another lost person in here", said a light voice behind him. The boy looked over his shoulder and saw a little girl. She had a big grin on her face, her eyes were slightly covered by her golden hair. "Look at your face! You look funny!". The girl jumped in front of him and pointed a finger at his face.
"Its not very nice to point a finger at someone", he explained more then annoyed. "Well, in that case", the girl said,"im deeply sorry. I thought you were a funny person. You look happy." She smiled and met his confused gaze.

"I do?", he asked.
"You do", she answered.

For the first time in his life the boy felt seen. The girl saw him as what he was. But how?

"Dont you think i look sad because of my frown?", he asked.
She shook her head. "In this forest i just see you as who you are", she answered.

Again he was happy over her answer, but at the same time he was left with more questions. "But how??! The others-", he couldnt finsih his sentence because she already interupted him. "The others meaning outside of the forest? They're influenced by others opinion. It's hard to stand your own ground. Easier to follow the pack, you know? I bet you wouldnt recognize me either. I will show you", she said and reached for his hand. He was unsure, but grabed her hand. After a while they managed to get out of the woods.

"Thank you!", he said and looked at his saviour. The girl looked even more cheerful then before. He told her so. She just smiled. But her eyes didnt seem so happy about that.
"I seem happy outside but inside i am sad. I am your opposite. But you dont see that here and-" Now he interupted her.
"But your eyes tell. I can see it now."
The girl looked at him surprised. Then she just laughed and huged him.

"You shall be my friend as you see me for who i am."

It seemed like a bit of her sadness vanished that day. Moreover the boys dark frown went softer. They found not only each other but their soul. They lived happily ever after.
Válasz erre: OLS Community Manager Marieke

Re: Writing Assignment for Workshop 04/06/2024

Singer Noy írta időpontban
He wandered off into the woods and…he found a little girl about the same age and hight. She also had a frown! They smiled at each other as they found something recognisable in the other. And so they liked each other instantly without any word spoken yet. He looked at her while smiling and asked immediately: ''Do other people also thing you are always sad, because of your frown? With me they do. I actually don't feel sad, it is just my face. But ... when they tell me I look sad, it actually makes me feel sad''. She replied: 'Yes I understand, I have that too. But you know; don't let others decide or set your mood. I learned that we are wonderful the way we are born. And if others think that looks sad, maybe it says there is a sadness inside of their heart. Because you know, I actually feel happy almost every day!' The boy smiled even more and reached out his hand to the girl. She accepted, and they walked away together hand in hand. And they lived happily ever after.
Válasz erre: Singer Noy

Re: Writing Assignment for Workshop 04/06/2024

OLS Community Manager Marieke írta időpontban
Dear Noy,

Thank you very much for sharing your version of this story! It's a true love story of two people who connect on having a similar history and help each other along the way. Below you will find some suggestions to improve the text:

  • The word 'hight' in the is spelt as 'height' in modern English
  • I would suggest to rewrite 'They liked each other instantly without any word spoken yet', to '... without speaking a word'
  • 'He looked at her while smiling and asked immediately' could be simplified to 'He smiled at her and asked'
  •  Be consistent in your use of quotation marks (i.e., "...", '...'). In British English you would use single quotation marks '...'.
  • And a general note is to be mindful of using the word 'actually'. It's not wrong in this text persé, but if it becomes a habit in your writing overall that wouldn't be beneficial in writing in a clear and direct manner.

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I hope this was somewhat helpful! If you have any questions, feel free to reach out!

Warmly, 

Marieke, OLS Community Manager