Dear Noy,
Thank you very much for sharing your version of this story! It's a true love story of two people who connect on having a similar history and help each other along the way. Below you will find some suggestions to improve the text:
Thank you very much for sharing your version of this story! It's a true love story of two people who connect on having a similar history and help each other along the way. Below you will find some suggestions to improve the text:
- The word 'hight' in the is spelt as 'height' in modern English
- I would suggest to rewrite 'They liked each other instantly without any word spoken yet', to '... without speaking a word'
- 'He looked at her while smiling and asked immediately' could be simplified to 'He smiled at her and asked'
- Be consistent in your use of quotation marks (i.e., "...", '...'). In British English you would use single quotation marks '...'.
- And a general note is to be mindful of using the word 'actually'. It's not wrong in this text persé, but if it becomes a habit in your writing overall that wouldn't be beneficial in writing in a clear and direct manner.
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I hope this was somewhat helpful! If you have any questions, feel free to reach out!
Warmly,
Marieke, OLS Community Manager